У меня вопрос ( сразу после занимательного чтения): кто-то, с придыханием, говорит " Ах, какая обалденная и правильная грамматика, аккуратные пробелы, все запятые вовремя!" Или выбирает книжки, где глотает страницу за страницей, по причине интересного сюжета?

A ship drops out of hyperspace: a little Starhopper. A one-person ship. Favored by many of the less desirable factions out here in the Outer Rim—the pirates, the bookies, the bounty hunters and those with bounties on their heads to hunt. This particular ship has seen action: plasma scarring across the wings and up its tail fins; a crumpled dent in the front end as if it was kicked by an Imperial walker. All the better for the ship to blend in.
Ahead: the planet Akiva. A small planet—from here, striations of brown and green. Thick white clouds swirling over its surface.
The pilot, Wedge Antilles, once Red Leader and now—well, now something else, a role without a formal title, as yet, because things are so new, so different, so wildly up in the air—sits there and takes a moment.

Математический ум, власть логики - беда для любого автора. Мы должны испытывать бурные эмоции и эмоции эти же вызывать.