Ребзя, ору. Один из комментов на реддите к этому тесту. Увага, простыня. Чего я ржу?


I have an 84 which is weird since my character is no where near a Mary Sue. It's just that his story is a satire of Minecraft animations and roleplays, but with a grim take on them.

Maxarius Telmegara:

He was the son of a Zombie Chieftain and a Human Woman, his mother was killed by the people of Ardi when he was born. This caused Max to have a dream of fixing the world of racism and hate. As he grows up he goes out as a vigilante taking down criminals in Ardi while going to school as that "quiet kid". He also has a friend, Adam, who is gay and the two bond over their hidden lives. Max also has a secret relationship with a girl named Lila, this is due to the fact that Lila is part of a wealthy family and works with the town's leader Ameria. Ameria is also the daughter of the woman that killed Max's mother. At some point, Max ended up getting Lila pregnant and promised to do her right. Word of Lila's pregnancy spread across the town and reached Ameria, an investigation saw that Max was half human and Adam was gay. This caused Adam's parents to be lynched and soon they tracked down the trio.

Max proposes to Lila, but before she could say yes, they are attacked by Ardi's soldiers and Lila is killed with the baby inside. Max then goes on a frenzy and kills for the first time, punching a soldier's face so hard it's just a puddle of blood. Adam is also killed and soon most of his tribe and father are dead.

Max fueled by rage goes to High Blades (a dangerous empire) and makes a deal. Revenge against Ardi for the freedom of Talos (his tribe's name). Max leads and army to raze the city, killing Ameria and hundreds in his wake. Eventually, he realized what he had done and rode West to enact his wrath onto the world.

I made Max as an anti-hero, he was a young kid who had a dream but fell from grace to become a dangerous monster.

He isn't perfect by conventional means, the only reason he can win most of his fights is cause he inherited the best by his parents which includes insane healing powers and incredible strength. He suffers everyday with his guilt of what he had done and at times his humanity comes on and off.

He joined a group called the Children of the Night and fought against Griefers, but he realized he unintentionally caused the deaths of innocent men, women, and children. So when a Griefer Queen and her baby were going to be executed, Max fought his way to protect them and give them a safe life. He would then become a hitman known as the Shadow, killing crime lords, not cause of justice, but cause he needs to unleash his rage and hate.

He's a bad man, and he admits it. He tries to do good and amen the sins he did, but it never feels like enough. His story is long and sad at times, and I could never do justice in one comment, but I will mention one thing.

In the end of his story, Max is an old man, still suffering from PTSD. But, he married and had a child, this time hoping to do right. However, his wife dies of sickness and he can feel himself dying of Tuberculosis as his healing powers slowly fail him. Max realizes he's on borrowed time and tries to make sure that his son can take care of himself.

He doesn't care if he goes to hell or what awaits him on the other side, if his son is safe and he is lifted from the pain he went through, he's find with that.

Max never cares about himself, he always tries his best to help others, but he isn't perfect. He's killed people, some who didn't deserve it and some who did, and he isn't proud of what he does and he isn't a role model. But, like many he pushes onwards and makes the best of what he does.

I just wanted to know, would some of his story make him sound like a Mary Sue? Cause, there might be some elements that I may have used incorrectly