voss22
У меня сложилось ровно то же впечатление. Я грешным делом сравниваю с недавно дочитанным Джорданом/Сандерсоном, своей писаниной, книгами Самуса и Альтры.
И если я с начала было привстал, мол, ух, а чувак умеет в описания, тут же понял, что нахуй.
События, которым можно было отвести пару глав, растянуты на 2.6 мб. И если даже растянуть, то можно во-первых, не делая из персонажей идиотов, во-вторых, не заливая океаном воды.

Не, надо через бота кого-то из нас погонять. Чего ж его для одного гиенинга использовать.

Я вот для опыта ещё на КВ потренировался, так мне политические махинации Ранда так разложили, я аж зачитался)

Собсна:
1. Establishing Authority and Intimidation
Move: Rand enters the scene with dramatic flair—clad in a red coat with golden embroidery, cradling Callandor like a scepter, and flanked by a hundred veiled Aiel warriors ready for violence.

Intent: To project unassailable power and silence dissent before it can emerge. The Aiel, an unpredictable and fearsome force to the Tairens, amplify his presence, while Callandor, a legendary sa’angreal tied to prophecy, underscores his identity as the Dragon Reborn.

Execution: The crowd parts “hurriedly, more than eagerly,” with nobles and commoners alike too intimidated to resist. His imperious demeanor and the Aiel’s anonymity create an atmosphere where opposition is unthinkable—Rand quells resistance “before it had a chance to coalesce,” as Moiraine notes.

Implication: This establishes Rand as a ruler who commands through fear as much as legitimacy, setting the tone for his subsequent decrees. It also alienates him from the Tairens, who view him as an outsider with a foreign army, but ensures compliance in the short term.

2. Neutralizing Internal Threats
Move: Rand disperses the seven most dangerous High Lords—Meilan, Gueyam, Aracome, Hearne, Maraconn, Simaan, and Torean—by sending them to lead and finance a military campaign in Cairhien, effectively exiling them from Tear.
Intent: To dismantle the core of Tairen noble opposition. Moiraine recognizes these seven as the linchpins of plots against Rand; by scattering them, he prevents coordinated rebellion.

Execution: He assigns Meilan command, leveraging his ambition, while saddling Torean, the wealthiest, with funding the campaign, tying their fates to its success. The lack of trust among these lords—“none of those men trusted each other enough to scheme among themselves”—ensures they remain divided. Rand’s public announcement, delivered with Callandor in hand, leaves no room for refusal.

Implication: This move guts Tear’s internal power structure, leaving Rand’s position secure in his absence. However, it risks destabilizing Tear long-term if these lords return emboldened or resentful, a gamble Rand seems willing to take given his immediate priorities.

3. Leveraging Economic and Humanitarian Pretexts
Move: Rand frames the Cairhien campaign as a mission to “restore order, and peace,” and to “feed the hungry,” promising Tairen grain to alleviate famine, with Alteima tasked to oversee distribution.

Intent: To legitimize his actions to the Tairens and mask his political purge as a noble cause. Tear’s overflowing granaries become a tool to justify military expansion and win limited support from nobles who see economic opportunity in new markets.

Execution: He ties the campaign to tangible benefits—“ships will soon be available to carry Tairen grain west”—while deflecting Meilan’s objections with a promise of aid rather than conquest. Alteima’s appointment, ostensibly humanitarian, doubles as a political play to elevate her status and punish her infidelity, keeping her occupied and away from Tear.

Implication: This softens the optics of his aggression, earning muted approval from some nobles, but Moiraine sees through it as a distraction from confronting the Forsaken. It also risks overextending Tear’s resources, though Rand bets on short-term stability to outweigh long-term costs.

4. Personal Manipulation and Retribution
Move: Rand publicly binds Sunamon’s fate to a treaty with Mayene, threatening execution if he fails, and orchestrates Alteima’s separation from her husband, placing him under Estanda’s care while sending Alteima to Cairhien.

Intent: To punish specific adversaries and exploit personal dynamics for control. Sunamon’s greed and Alteima’s plotting against her husband make them ripe targets for Rand’s justice, serving as examples to others.

Execution: Sunamon’s treaty is announced with a mocking laugh—“he has guaranteed this with his life”—turning his fate into a public spectacle that cows the nobles. Alteima’s assignment, paired with her husband’s relocation to Estanda (her rival), is a cruel twist that ensures her compliance while destabilizing her alliances. Her fainting underscores the effectiveness of Rand’s psychological blow.

Implication: These moves demonstrate Rand’s willingness to blend justice with cruelty, as Egwene notes (“very clever, and very cruel”). They deter further scheming but deepen his isolation, painting him as a ruler who rules through fear rather than loyalty.

5. Symbolic Power Play with Callandor
Move: Rand drives Callandor into the Stone’s floor, declaring it a test for any would-be usurper—“If anyone wants to take my place, all they have to do is pull it out”—and rigs it with a trap against channeling attempts to remove it.

Intent: To relinquish Callandor’s immediate burden while cementing his authority in absentia. It serves as a physical reminder of his claim and a deterrent against both Tairen rebels and the Forsaken.

Execution: The dramatic act—lightning arcing, the Stone shaking—terrifies the crowd, reinforcing his supernatural power. His casual challenge (“remember the price of failure”) mocks potential rivals, while the trap (which he hints is Power-triggered) safeguards it from enemies like Lanfear or Sammael.

Implication: This secures his departure for Rhuidean by leaving a symbol too potent to ignore, though Moiraine warns of its vulnerability to male Forsaken. It also reflects Rand’s growing cunning with the One Power, suggesting he’s learning to wield it strategically beyond brute force.

Strategic Strengths
Decentralization of Power: By exiling the High Lords and leaving Callandor as a focal point, Rand ensures no single figure can consolidate power in Tear during his absence.

Multilayered Threats: He combines physical intimidation (Aiel), political exile (High Lords), and symbolic authority (Callandor) to cover all bases of resistance.

Psychological Edge: His unpredictability—shifting from treaty announcements to military campaigns to personal vendettas—keeps opponents off-balance.

Prophetic Leverage: Citing the prophecy (“Into the heart he thrusts his sword”) ties his actions to destiny, bolstering his legitimacy even among skeptics.

Strategic Risks
Overreach: The Cairhien campaign diverts resources and attention from immediate threats like Illian and Sammael, as Moiraine critiques. It could bog down Tear’s forces in a quagmire, as Meilan warns.

Alienation: His harshness and reliance on fear erode potential alliances, leaving him with few loyal supporters beyond the Aiel.

Callandor’s Exposure: Despite the trap, leaving Callandor risks its capture by a male Forsaken, a danger Rand downplays but Moiraine fears.

Absence: Departing for Rhuidean leaves Tear vulnerable to unrest, especially if Alteima or Sunamon defy expectations or if the exiled lords return with grudges.

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация
Там буквально в книгах пропали многие абзацы и страницы текста. Но и тут тоже идиот бол - не "ой, какая-то хуйня, что-то не так", а начали выдумывать абсурдные причины чтобы обосновать эти пробелы: "Переписчики могли оставить место, чтобы потом дописать, такое иногда бывает".

В общем, придумывать самые абсурдные и вытянутые из жопы теории, тянуть сову на глобус, только чтобы не принять самое очевидное - тут персонажи мне действительно напомнили любое обсуждение дамбигада. Просто обосремся, за жопу себя укусим, но не примем очевидного - Dumbledore is epitome of goodness.
Если так подумать, даже чуть жизненно.

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация
Ты прости, я эти простыни не особо читаю. С мобилы башка от них болит и глаза.

Desmоnd

Бывает, чо)

Desmоnd


Устранить противоречие, о котором говорится в 9 правиле, хыхы
Но вообще попахивает одноногим Ричардом

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Samus2001
Так понравилось, так понравилось, что не хочешь забашлять мне бабла?

Не понимаю. ГХА что, больше не будет валарить и маргулисить перед примечаниями???

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация

Вот что дамблдор администрации животворящий делает!
В новой главе нет смаркулиса?

Samus2001
Примечания есть, а "Валар Маргулис" нет. Наступили на горло традиции((

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация

Вполне возможно, что он писал ее 3 недели назад (и тогда слова о написании 34 главы пиздеж в духе мастара), когда не чувствовал себя в безопасности
Или так пересрал, что ему снесут профиль, что удалил везде маргулисов - в следующий понедельник узнаем

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация
Samus2001
Знатоки, а у Мартина эти моргулисы сильно часто встречаются? Или он взял мелкую деталь, и дохера раздул?

кукурузник
У Мартина это тайное приветствие ассассинской гильдии, што ле.

Тощий Бетон_вторая итерация
Это я помню, кто-то говорил - а они в сюжете часто появляются?
Ну типа семь книг, и только в четвертой им уделено 3 главы из 11, а потом о них не вспомнили - или они с первой были и в сюжете важны.

#Радость_Бетона

Hrofft85
вчера в 03:49

Что такое Валар Моргулис?

Garret Hawke Amell
автор
сегодня в 01:19
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Цитата с игры престолов одного персонажа)

Alexey Volkov
вчера в 11:27
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Могу ответить лишь частично. Евгений Маргулис - один из лучших русских гитаристов и певцов. Можете посмотреть на его дискографию, и вы скорее всего согласитесь. Подозреваю, что автор - поклонник его творчества и таким образом высказывает своё уважение.

Garret Hawke Amell
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сегодня в 01:20
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Есть такой в плейлисте)

Шта.

Samus2001
Как перестать орать?